The florist shop window full of
flowers so fresh they look fake
is one of the things that helps to make
this journey nice to take
and the sunlight in the morning
makes the city look quite pretty
but nobody ever really looks
and that is such a pity.
by hayley, de montfort university
1 comment:
Dear Hayley,
I think this is very good indeed - the idea that the flowers are so beautiful they look fake is very strong. The last couple of lines are very good too. I'd change the word "nice" if possible - it's weak. Good stuff!!!
Thanks for posting, Jonathan
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