Thursday, 16 October 2008

The florist shop window full of

flowers so fresh they look fake

is one of the things that helps to make

this journey nice to take

and the sunlight in the morning

makes the city look quite pretty

but nobody ever really looks

and that is such a pity.

by hayley, de montfort university

1 comment:

Jonathan Taylor said...

Dear Hayley,

I think this is very good indeed - the idea that the flowers are so beautiful they look fake is very strong. The last couple of lines are very good too. I'd change the word "nice" if possible - it's weak. Good stuff!!!

Thanks for posting, Jonathan