Thursday 16 October 2008

POEM – GUILTY CONSCIOUS

Now, I don’t know where to begin,
So starting at the end makes sense.
The light has departed without a goodbye and,
Within seconds, the night has arrived without an invitation.

My mind is blanker than a clean page.
Here I am, guilty without being charged,
Without one knowing what I have committed.
I didn’t have time to correct but I still made mistakes.

That dark place surrounds me like a claustrophobic surrounded by walls.
As the minutes pass I know what to be expecting,
But for now, during these hours that darkness talks to me,
The night’s silence is the loudest form of communication.

I am shadow of death.
I cannot accept innocence.
That guilty conscious won’t allow to me
I am liable for the murder of time.

POEM – GUILTY CONSCIOUS
BY RAMAIZE ATIQUE DMU UNIVERSITY,
LEICESTER
ENGLAND

1 comment:

Jonathan Taylor said...

Dear Ramaize,

My favourite lines here are:

"The light has departed without a goodbye and,
Within seconds, the night has arrived without an invitation."

Here, you find a way of defamiliarising the commonplace (i.e. the arrival of night). Some of the rest of the poem is a little unfocussed - perhaps you need a slightly more concrete sense of place and narrator. Still, a very interesting piece - thanks for posting.

Jonathan